tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post2552331325647044491..comments2024-01-05T23:33:00.776-08:00Comments on bisous mon amour ; cupcakes for petit déjeuner: I'll Give Her MelodiesCassidyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07707166267039688918noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-89798891285142644582011-02-01T22:07:31.700-08:002011-02-01T22:07:31.700-08:00The tenses in the first paragraph are really confu...The tenses in the first paragraph are really confusing--you say you miss the summer days, then profess that you want something that you explain the first part in the future tense (saying you WILL do this and that) and then it randomly switches to things that WOULD happen... it is slightly offputting.<br /><br />I think you're very eager to write about a lot of these happenings, like going to the thrift stores, but I think it might be really beneficial and good for the development of the story to actually explain these pursuits to boutiques and thrift stores. I feel that way about the apartment, too. I know that it's a shit hole and that it's your home, but maybe add a little more imagery about little details, you know? I think I'd be more enveloped in this excerpt if you showed me more, rather than told me.<br /><br />It has a lot of potential and I really want to read it all done. If this were a published book I can already tell that I'd read it guiltily on the beach and lovingly insert myself into the character's positions. But as for now, it all seems a little stagnant, and devoid of warmth, and I think you need to take a little more time to explain things. but that's just me!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-16762473286478164842011-02-01T15:01:59.898-08:002011-02-01T15:01:59.898-08:00Such inspiring photos and writing! Thanks for the ...Such inspiring photos and writing! Thanks for the reply, just found my film camera :D Thanks for the lovely comment, new post up!<br />www.swampedinflowers.blogspot.comIzzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12919316860952330106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-44385555750008423712011-02-01T13:20:57.727-08:002011-02-01T13:20:57.727-08:00I love the photos and the way you bring the story ...I love the photos and the way you bring the story to life with your descriptions.Nikkihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04088103005025176008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-9843636951356425982011-02-01T10:03:10.879-08:002011-02-01T10:03:10.879-08:00hey!!! very cool this post and your blog!! what he...hey!!! very cool this post and your blog!! what header!! is fantastic1:) im a new follower!<br /><br />Look my blog and if you like it, follow me.<br /><br />www.sickbytrend.com<br /><br />xx :)<br /><br />sBtSick by Trendhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05236942882698109279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-34184197126006616612011-01-31T22:40:41.434-08:002011-01-31T22:40:41.434-08:00Thank you for your kind words on my blog... Love t...Thank you for your kind words on my blog... Love this collection of words and images xAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-62527364693017946742011-01-31T19:50:43.828-08:002011-01-31T19:50:43.828-08:00Love these pics.
Thanks so much for your comment,...Love these pics.<br /><br />Thanks so much for your comment, check out my new post if you like : )<br /><br /> <a href="http://www.baublesandbangles.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">www.baublesandbangles.blogspot.com</a><br /><br /> <a href="http://www.rosivintage.etsy.com" rel="nofollow">www.rosivintage.etsy.com</a><br /><br />-Stephaniesbothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05497227057706099166noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-23824469557358055312011-01-31T18:36:21.446-08:002011-01-31T18:36:21.446-08:00loveee these photos. especially zoe deschanel.loveee these photos. especially zoe deschanel.Kimia Klinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09628325659767593169noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-28553683588265290632011-01-31T18:07:49.650-08:002011-01-31T18:07:49.650-08:00This post is divine! love the pics! Thank you sw...This post is divine! love the pics! Thank you sweetie for dropping by GirlWhimsy. Have a whimsical week!<br /><br />http://girlwhimsy.blogspot.comA Whimsical Girl Named Debbiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03808865976763729896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-1776303419654906852011-01-31T13:21:57.498-08:002011-01-31T13:21:57.498-08:00i really miss long summers too.... beautiful pics!...i really miss long summers too.... beautiful pics! thanks 4 the inspirationBarbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01673397467647110459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-68209568772865461932011-01-31T11:16:16.224-08:002011-01-31T11:16:16.224-08:00That sounds so perfect, i am longing for summer so...That sounds so perfect, i am longing for summer so badly at the moment!! Love the photos too, the second one is brilliant!<br />xxxxxxCaroline Ergy Erghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12851159045154887073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-74773779164278522212011-01-31T07:46:55.687-08:002011-01-31T07:46:55.687-08:00hey there, you have such a gorgeous blog. You have...hey there, you have such a gorgeous blog. You have an amazing collection of images and photographs, I espectally love the lolita set!!! xoLauren Noelle Ricehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09867519392822801846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-5584823842857578362011-01-31T03:40:04.335-08:002011-01-31T03:40:04.335-08:00Really cute jacket :)
Love, Vanilla
http://vanil...Really cute jacket :)<br /><br />Love, Vanilla<br /><br />http://vanillaheartsstyle.blogspot.com/Vanillahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03313810621147620263noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-23065247710580772362011-01-30T21:24:18.063-08:002011-01-30T21:24:18.063-08:00love these photos, and thanks for sharing your wri...love these photos, and thanks for sharing your writing!Aprilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03861489697130450313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-5027957907036523492011-01-30T19:55:15.955-08:002011-01-30T19:55:15.955-08:00love your writing! and all the photos are so cute....love your writing! and all the photos are so cute. i always love coming to your blog <3<br /><br /><br />hope to hear from you soon!<br />xo, camilla & valerie<br />abutterflybyday.blogspot.comvalncamihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06581660542277283883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-91599372352348602922011-01-30T14:19:14.289-08:002011-01-30T14:19:14.289-08:00lovely! so inspiring:)lovely! so inspiring:)Juliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11895759809482913974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-63082329335787499632011-01-30T13:26:35.966-08:002011-01-30T13:26:35.966-08:00Beautiful pictures, and I love that story! You wri...Beautiful pictures, and I love that story! You write so nicely.<br />From Carys of <a href="http://lavilleinconnue.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">La Ville Inconnue</a>Caryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07229603935499988940noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-14193173257792122922011-01-30T05:20:06.907-08:002011-01-30T05:20:06.907-08:00ah great pictures, love them :)
www.theperfectpla...ah great pictures, love them :)<br /><br />www.theperfectplayground.blogspot.comfreyjahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01438350713554268856noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-10335765867389091052011-01-30T03:09:43.927-08:002011-01-30T03:09:43.927-08:00These pictures are amazing.
The last picture is hi...These pictures are amazing.<br />The last picture is hilarious XD what-ever XD hehehe. Genius!<br /><br />xxx London & Paris<br /><br />ps: would you like to join our giveawayThe Mad Twinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10624788411060277723noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-44294309447092935312011-01-30T01:44:58.793-08:002011-01-30T01:44:58.793-08:00Super! i like retro! and your writing is amazing !...Super! i like retro! and your writing is amazing ! xoxoUrtėhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01518567023936568221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-82971973226611905932011-01-29T23:20:32.696-08:002011-01-29T23:20:32.696-08:00loooove your writing!!!loooove your writing!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17449516106597028576noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-70196834928770745312011-01-29T21:33:06.297-08:002011-01-29T21:33:06.297-08:00GO SEE BLACK SWAN! It's amazing :)
Love this ...GO SEE BLACK SWAN! It's amazing :)<br /><br />Love this post!<br /><br />M.Monicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17294962241447404053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-59075834817804943572011-01-29T20:57:37.542-08:002011-01-29T20:57:37.542-08:00Gorgeous, how charming that denim jacket is. xGorgeous, how charming that denim jacket is. xmckenzie.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16033982889583470504noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1871830123783346464.post-63512085499621445812011-01-29T19:28:25.795-08:002011-01-29T19:28:25.795-08:00thank you! your blog is also very lovely - I love ...thank you! your blog is also very lovely - I love the pictures you post!Noonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13022374452292757104noreply@blogger.com